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the charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

the charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
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The given pie charts depict the proportion of students in England who are able to speak in other
languages
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 rather than English.
Overall
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, the two graphs illustrate the percentage of children who can speak only English or that of those who have the ability to speak in other
languages
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 in 2000 and 2010. With regard to the biggest portion of the second spoken language which is Spanish, it is obvious that the highest number of spoken
languages
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 has always been Spanish with a percentage of 30
percent
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 in 2000 and 35
percent
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 in 2010. The second level in 2010 belongs to another language which is not mentioned
while
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 in 2000
this
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 level related to the people who could only speak English. Concerning the lowest percentage which is 10
percent
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, it has been shown for the 2000 pie chart in order to illustrate the portion of students who can speak two other
languages
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. In 2010,
On the other hand
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,
this
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 number belongs to the people who
do
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did
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 not speak another language which
is
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was
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 reduced by 10
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percent
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per cent
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 from 2000 to 2010, those who
speak
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spoke
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 French by a 5
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percent
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per cent
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 reduction in comparison with 2000,
together with
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 students who can speak German which has remained the same.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words languages, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrate" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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