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the charts below show the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to english, in 2000 and 2010

the charts below show the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to english, in 2000 and 2010
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The two pie charts provide information about the percentages of British
pupils
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 who can speak different
languages
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besides
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 English at a particular university in England in 2000 and 2010.
It is clear that
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 the majority of British
pupils
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 speak only Spanish in both years.
Moreover
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, in 2010, the percentage of
pupils
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 who could not speak any other
languages
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 saw a decrease. At that time, more
students
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 could speak more than two other
languages
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. Looking at the information in more detail, in 2000, the
students
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 who were Spanish
speakers
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 were 1.5 times as many as the
students
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 who could only speak English. As for French
speakers
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 and German
speakers
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, the percentages of the former constituted 15%, and the latter
languages
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 accounted for 10%. Compared to 2000, 15% of
students
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 had the ability to speak two other
languages
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 in 2010.
While
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 French
speakers
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 and German
speakers
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 showed the same proportion of 10%, the
pupils
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 who could speak only Spanish remained the primary constituency at 35% of the total during the given period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words pupils, languages, students, speakers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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