Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Other believes that all countries should have the same responsibilities toward protecting the environment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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environment
issues some Replace the word
environmental
people
think that developed countries
have more responsibility inside
addressing climate change. Change preposition
in
However
, many others believe that all countries
over
the world have to do tasks to protect Rephrase
all over
environment
. In Add an article
the environment
this
essay today, both of the views will be discussed then
personal opinion
will be presented.
On the one hand, I agree that Fix the agreement mistake
opinions
conservation
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the conservation
environment
is a task Correct pronoun usage
that belong
belong
to every Correct subject-verb agreement
belongs
countries
, but there are some reasons Change to a singular noun
country
make
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that make
people
consider that this
situation is owned by developed countries
instead
of developing countries
. Firstly
, because of the flourish
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flourishing
industriment
, the developed Correct your spelling
industry
countries
consumed more fossil fuel, which emmisse
carbon Correct your spelling
emissive
dioxit
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dioxide
dioxin
along with
detrimental effects from factories to Correct article usage
the atmostphere
atmostphere
. Correct your spelling
atmosphere
Secondly
, besides
fossil fuel, the developed countries
have a huge of migrate
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migrating
people
come from world wide
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worldwide
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live
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living
new
nation Add an article
the new
was
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were
the
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apply
caution
of enormous waste to push down in Replace the word
cautious
environment
.
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the environment
On the other hand
, above
some reasons cause Change preposition
apply
people
think
pollution Add the particle
to think
was
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is
proccessed
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processed
developed
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in developed
countries
, I believe that every body
in the world must have Correct your spelling
everybody
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a responsiblity
responsiblity
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responsibility
to address
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for addressing
environment
problems. The first one is that Replace the word
environmental
the
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apply
environment
pollution Replace the word
environmental
did
not just Wrong verb form
does
occures
in developed Correct your spelling
occurs
occur
countries
, it included
small Wrong verb form
includes
countries
, developing
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and developing
countries
. Smorking
in factories, vehicles or daily activities residents have Correct your spelling
Smoking
orginal
from all cities, not except tiny or big and belong to developed Correct your spelling
original
countries
or developing countries
. Furthermore
, desfogestation
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deforestation
happened
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happens
countries
when people
cut down trees or destroy vegetation to assist to
handy ways in order to attain economic benefits. Change preposition
in
Moreover
, if every countries
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country
protect
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protects
their
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its
environment
, they
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it
also
strengthen
and Correct subject-verb agreement
strengthens
support
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supports
their
future Correct pronoun usage
its
along with
their
next generations.
In conclusion, Change the word
the
although
it is reasonable that developed countries
have a higher responsibilty
to combat climate change than developing Correct your spelling
responsibility
countries
, I would argue that it is all countries
should have similar
responsibility toward protecting Correct article usage
a similar
environment
.Add an article
the environment
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Language Proficiency
Be cautious with spelling and grammatical errors such as 'atmostphere' (atmosphere), 'desfogestation' (deforestation) and 'industriment' (industry or industrialization). These minor mistakes can distract from the overall quality of your response.
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Try to develop your ideas more fully. For instance, when discussing the responsibilities of developed countries versus developing countries, providing specific examples or evidence to support your arguments can make your essay more compelling.
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Task Response
You have included both sides of the argument and your own opinion, which addresses the task requirement well.
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