Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Other believes that all countries should have the same responsibilities toward protecting the environment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
In order to deal with
the
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apply
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environment
issues some Replace the word
environmental
people
think that developed Use synonyms
countries
have more responsibility Use synonyms
inside
addressing climate change. Change preposition
in
However
, many others believe that all Linking Words
countries
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over
the world have to do tasks to protect Rephrase
all over
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environment
. In Add an article
the environment
this
essay today, both of the views will be discussed Linking Words
then
personal Linking Words
opinion
will be presented.
On the one hand, I agree that Fix the agreement mistake
opinions
conservation
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the conservation
environment
is a task Use synonyms
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that belong
belong
to every Correct subject-verb agreement
belongs
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countries
, but there are some reasons Change to a singular noun
country
make
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that make
people
consider that Use synonyms
this
situation is owned by developed Linking Words
countries
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instead
of developing Linking Words
countries
. Use synonyms
Firstly
, because of the Linking Words
flourish
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flourishing
industriment
, the developed Correct your spelling
industry
countries
consumed more fossil fuel, which Use synonyms
emmisse
carbon Correct your spelling
emissive
dioxit
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dioxide
dioxin
along with
detrimental effects from factories to Linking Words
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the atmostphere
atmostphere
. Correct your spelling
atmosphere
Secondly
, Linking Words
besides
fossil fuel, the developed Linking Words
countries
have a huge of Use synonyms
migrate
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migrating
people
come from Use synonyms
world wide
. Correct your spelling
worldwide
People
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live
in Wrong verb form
living
new
nation Add an article
the new
was
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were
the
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apply
caution
of enormous waste to push down in Replace the word
cautious
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environment
.
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the environment
On the other hand
, Linking Words
above
some reasons cause Change preposition
apply
people
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think
pollution Add the particle
to think
was
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is
proccessed
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processed
developed
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in developed
countries
, I believe that Use synonyms
every body
in the world must have Correct your spelling
everybody
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a responsiblity
responsiblity
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responsibility
to address
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for addressing
Use synonyms
environment
problems. The first one is that Replace the word
environmental
the
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apply
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environment
pollution Replace the word
environmental
did
not just Wrong verb form
does
occures
in developed Correct your spelling
occurs
occur
countries
, it Use synonyms
included
small Wrong verb form
includes
countries
, Use synonyms
developing
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and developing
countries
. Use synonyms
Smorking
in factories, vehicles or daily activities residents have Correct your spelling
Smoking
orginal
from all cities, not except tiny or big and belong to developed Correct your spelling
original
countries
or developing Use synonyms
countries
. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, Linking Words
desfogestation
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deforestation
happened
in all Wrong verb form
happens
countries
when Use synonyms
people
cut down trees or destroy vegetation to assist Use synonyms
to
handy ways in order to attain economic benefits. Change preposition
in
Moreover
, if every Linking Words
Use synonyms
countries
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country
protect
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protects
their
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its
environment
, Use synonyms
they
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it
also
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strengthen
and Correct subject-verb agreement
strengthens
support
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supports
their
future Correct pronoun usage
its
along with
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their
next generations.
In conclusion, Change the word
the
although
it is reasonable that developed Linking Words
countries
have a higher Use synonyms
responsibilty
to combat climate change than developing Correct your spelling
responsibility
countries
, I would argue that it is all Use synonyms
countries
should have Use synonyms
similar
responsibility toward protecting Correct article usage
a similar
Use synonyms
environment
.Add an article
the environment
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Language Proficiency
Be cautious with spelling and grammatical errors such as 'atmostphere' (atmosphere), 'desfogestation' (deforestation) and 'industriment' (industry or industrialization). These minor mistakes can distract from the overall quality of your response.
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Try to develop your ideas more fully. For instance, when discussing the responsibilities of developed countries versus developing countries, providing specific examples or evidence to support your arguments can make your essay more compelling.
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