The bar graphs illustrate the proportion of who watched reality and game shows in men and women and 16-24, 25-34, 35-44 and 45+ age groups in Australia.
The bar charts compare the proportion of Australians who watch
reality
and game
shows by sex and age
. Overall
, a higher rate
of females watch reality
shows than males
while
an equal percentage
of males
and females watch game
shows. Those over 45 watch reality
and game
shows the most whereas
16 to 24 age
groups and 25 to 34 age
groups watch them the least respectively.
Starting with the graph of reality
shows, the rate
of female viewers is 70%, which is twice as much as that of males
. Then
, the age
group with the lowest percentage
is 16 to 24 with slightly over 50%. In addition
, there is a gradual increase in viewership as people age
since approximately 60% of 25 to 34 age
groups watch reality
shows and the percentage
of viewers from 35 to 44 goes up a little higher with slightly under 70%. Lastly
, those over 45 have the highest rate
with just below 70%.
Turning to the viewership for game
shows, there is not a significant change in the rates between males
and females with slightly above 60% and about 60% respectively. First,
almost half of those from 16 to 24 watch game
shows. Secondly
, the rate
of the 25 to 34 age
group hits the bottom at just below 40% while
that of 35 to 44 is around 40%. Finally
, the highest percentage
of people over 45 view game
shows with slightly under 70%.Submitted by mizuho on
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