The bar chart shows the information of the number of volunteers and paid workers in 4 different roles in the sports sector of an Australian town in 2015.

The bar chart shows the information of the number of volunteers and paid workers in 4 different roles in the sports sector of an Australian town in 2015.
The bar chart provides data about the
number
of
volunteers
and paid
workers
in 4 different
roles
in the
sports
sector
in an Australian town in 2015
Overall
it is clear that
usually, the
number
of
volunteers
had higher
roles
in the
sports
sector
than paid
workers
, particularly in 3
roles
about coaching, Therapists and other sections.
While
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the referees of paid
workers
had a higher figure than the
volunteers
.
According to
the coaching
volunteers
, the highest figure amounts to 75
people
in 4
roles
.
Moreover
, the other sections had a
number
of
people
around 60
while
The Therapist role had 45
people
in the
sports
sector
.
However
, the
people
in referee
roles
had the lowest figure around 30
people
overall
of
volunteers
in the
sports
sector
.
In addition
, The
overall
number
of paid
workers
was lower than
volunteers
,
while
the other sections had the highest
number
of
people
around 50
while
the coaching had 45
people
.
However
, the therapists and referees had similar numbers of
people
to 39-40
people
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, overall, while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, volunteers, workers, roles, sports, sector, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • volunteers
  • paid workers
  • roles
  • sports sector
  • Australian town
  • duties
  • motivations
  • significance
  • contribution
  • professionalism
  • specialization
  • sustainability
  • distribution
  • trends
  • volunteerism
  • community engagement
  • professional development
  • accessibility
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