Some employers offer their employees subsidized membership of gyms and sport clubs, believe that this will make their staff healthier and more effective at work. Other employees find no benefit doing so. Discuss both views.
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gyms
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clubs, under the idea that Change the noun form
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much Correct your spelling
employees
healtier
and more effective at Correct your spelling
healthier
work
. Other Use synonyms
employees
have found no positive effects on doing Use synonyms
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employees
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membership
for Use synonyms
gyms
, I believe companies that offer a Use synonyms
membership
card for Use synonyms
gyms
will have a Use synonyms
healtier
staff and Correct your spelling
healthier
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will be much more effective at Correct your spelling
employees
work
.
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company's
owners found no positive effects on providing Change noun form
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, so these rooms are usually a waste of money. Change preposition
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employees
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reasons. Correct your spelling
healthy
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offer
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getting paid for doing some Use synonyms
exercise
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exercise
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,
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