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The bar chart shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.

The bar chart shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.
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The bar graph demonstrates how much money was spent on five main categories in the USA, China, the UK, and Japan in 2009.
Overall
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, the largest proportion of money was allocated to housing,
whereas
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 clothing and healthcare were the least popular among the four
countries
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To begin
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 with, all the shares of housing expenditures in the four
countries
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 constituted approximately the same, accounting for between 20% and 25%.
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, there were significant differences among
countries
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 in terms of food, which the figure for Japan was noticeably higher than that of the US by a large margin of 10%. Regarding transportation expenses, Canada took the first place with
the
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 percentage of 20%,
while
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 the lowest spending level was attributed to Japan with 10%. To continue with, the shares of healthcare and clothing were lower than 10% in all
countries
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.
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 the USA ranked first in terms of
the
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medical expenditures with
the
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 proportion of 10%, Canada gave the preference to spend its money on clothing more than other
countries
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, which constituted just over 5%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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