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You recently spent the night at an expensive hotel. There was a problem with room, but the hotel staff was unable to do anything about it. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In you letter 1 Introduce yourself 2 describe the problem 3 say what you would like the manager to do.

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Dear Sir or Madam, Why the reason I am writing
this
 letter is about
yours
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 big
hotel
 problems and your workers have some
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problems
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problem
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problems
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 with
dependent
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the dependent
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clients
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client
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.
Last
 week, I went to
yours
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hotel
 and I
taken
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took
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 18th
rooms
 for one night
to
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 expensive money because I heard about information
yours
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hotel
. I did not know there
are
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 problems at
this
 place so I
given
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 more money to one
rooms
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. At the time. I asked
one
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rooms
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 for me
additionally
 I taken,
however
, I
come
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 to
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the rooms
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rooms
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room
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 and I saw disorderly
thing
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, cigarette-but, food residue.
At
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this
 situation,
my
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 make sick and I called
yours
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 staff, they did not come to my
rooms
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 so I did not sleep
this
 night. At
this
 time I went to
yours
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 staff unfortunately they did not hear me. You have to give money to me
due to
yours
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hotel
 is uncomfortable for clients.
Besides
 that, if you
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 your workers,
yours
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hotel
 will be comfortable and popular
to
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other city
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because
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 your problems with
dependent
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yours
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 staff. Yours faithfully, Shodiyorova Feruza.
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structure
Try to structure your letter more clearly with separate paragraphs for introduction, problem description, and your request.
clarity
Focus on providing a clear and specific description of the problem and the outcome you desire.
language
Use formal language and check your spelling and grammar to make your letter more professional.
tone
Make sure to use polite and respectful language when making requests or expressing dissatisfaction.
purpose
You have introduced yourself and clearly stated the purpose of your letter.
attempted resolution
You made an attempt to describe the problem and suggest a resolution.
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