The graphs below compare the number of cosmetic procedures performed on males and females in Korea in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
Overall
, it is evident that Korean
females favour these procedures significantly more than Korean
males. In addition
, there is a considerable difference in the types of popular operations between the genders.
Regarding Korean
women, about 320,000 of them had Eyelid surgery( highest number) while
only a mere about 120,000 had operated Liposuction( lowest number). Rhinoplasty at about 280,000 ranks second,
followed by Laser Skin Resurfacing and Breast enlargement at just above 200,000 and around 150,000 respectively.
Hair Transplantation stands at the top rank with 60,000 for Korean
males and Lasser skin resurfacing closely following
with just about 5000 lower in number. 40,000 Wrong verb form
follows
of
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apply
Korean
men went through Rhinoplasty in 2004, making it the third most popular. And
Correct word choice
Finally
finally
, with marginally below 20 thousand and about 18 thousand, Abdominoplasty and Liposuction are the least relatively popular operations respectively.Submitted by soroush.nezami on
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