The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two bar
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charts
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demonstrated the 4 other
pathway
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for higher education
students
in the United Kingdom who did not commit to the working field after their graduation in 2008.
First
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chart
displayed the choices of UK
colledge
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college
graduates in 2008. 29665 graduates choose to have
further
study
which is the most popular choice among the other three options. The second highest would be working part-time with 17735
students
, with around 12000 difference
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the number of
students
having
further
study
. The least picked option would be doing voluntary work, with only 3500
students
. Almost 9 times fewer than
students
having
further
study
.
Second
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chart
showed
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the destination of UK postgraduates in 2008 which
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a
simillar
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similar
pattern
with
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the first
chart
. Once again the most popular decision for postgraduates
are
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having
further
study
, with 2725
students
. The least popular selection is
also
doing voluntary work, with only 345
students
.
This
time the number of postgraduates choosing
working
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part-time is much closer to
students
having
further
study
than the first
chart
. With only 200
students
differnce
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difference
.
Overall
, both
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shows a common pattern
which
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students
in
UK
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the UK
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prefer to have
further
study
and
students
are
lessly
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less
like
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likely
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to participate in voluntary work.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic pursuit
  • temporary employment
  • voluntary work
  • further studies
  • part-time work
  • full-time employment
  • data representation
  • statistical comparison
  • post-educational paths
  • job market
  • unemployment rate
  • career advancement
  • skill development
  • lifelong learning
  • employment sector
  • vocational training
  • economic trends
  • workforce participation
  • career aspirations
  • higher education
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