The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The given bar chart
illucirates
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illustrates
the
factor
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factors
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, which make
individual
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individuals
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to
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apply
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Study as per their
age
as well as
employer support. As we can see in the chart ,
that
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apply
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the significance for
career
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a career
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is higher than for
interest
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an interest
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under the
age
of 26.
However
, there is
also
a
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an
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Opposite situation for above 49
age
individual.
According to
the chart, there is a Complete opposite situation for the reason of studying by
age
of people. Below 26 Years old have
highest
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the highest
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majority of
individual
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individuals
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by
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apply
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80% who are studying for
career
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a career
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and
also
have the
least
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lowest
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group of people
by
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apply
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10% who study for
interest
. As the
age
is increasing
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increases
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, the Percentage
for
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of
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career
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careers
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also
decreasing
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decreases
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and
for
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apply
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interest
is growing. In the time period of 40-49, there is a clear
equallity
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equality
in studying for
carrer
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career
careers
as well as
interest
. meanwhile, the support of
employer
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employers
show examples
also
get
Verb problem
apply
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decline
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declines
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as the
age
of
individual
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the individual
an individual
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is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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drop
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drops
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.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, interest with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.

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