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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
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The graph compares the proportion of
shiping
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shipping
 from
Australian
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Australia
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 to different four regions during the period
1990
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from 1990
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 and 2012.
Overall
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, four regions experienced different trends during the given period of time.
While
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 Japan and
US
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the US
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 witnessed a downward trend, India and China,
on the other hand
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, saw an upward trend. China saw the most dramatic increase from the lowest in 1990 to the highest in 2012. Starting from below 5%, as the second lowest point, in 1990, China
was
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surpassed
US
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the US
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 and Japan in around 2003 and 2024 respectively. 
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 increase
also
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occured
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occurred
 in India, but in 2012, the graph showed
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a gradually
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gradually
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 decline.
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, Japan and
US
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the US
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,
were
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which were
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 previously the first and the second in the group, started to fall, with a little help.

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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • export
  • trend
  • time period
  • individually
  • comparison
  • significant changes
  • notable anomalies
  • influenced
  • increase
  • decrease
  • fluctuation
  • steady
  • sharp rise
  • sharp decline
  • stagnation
  • data
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