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You and a couple of your colleagues would like to participate in a work-related seminar. Write a letter to your colleague who is the person in charge of the seminar and ask for: Detailed information regarding the dates Program schedule Enquire about cost and possible discounts for groups

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Dear Praneeth, I hope
this
 letter finds you well and good in health. I am writing
this
 letter because I
had
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 some questions in
regards
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regard
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 to the seminar that was mentioned in the meeting
last
 Friday.
Firstly
, I would like to know the exact time period that
this
 program is conducted as I am taking a
vaction
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vacation
 and
wants
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want
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 to make sure if my plans
needs
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need
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 to be altered to attend
this
 seminar.
Moreover
, can I get more information on the speakers and duration of the seminar please?
On the other hand
, there are
total
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a total
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 of 15 adults including me who are planning to attend
this
 event and would like to know if there are any group concessions.
Additionally
, we were wondering if there is any food or snacks included with the purchase of the ticket. Looking forward to hearing back from you. Your's
faithfully
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, Sasha Kota.
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Task Achievement
To enhance your letter, consider providing a bit more detail or specific questions about the seminar's program schedule. This could help in demonstrating a clearer understanding and stronger interest in the event's content.
Task Achievement
Consider a slight adjustment in your start, directly stating the purpose of your letter for a stronger opening.
Coherence and Cohesion
Pay attention to minor grammatical issues and perhaps rephrase for clarity ('I am taking a vacation and want to make sure if my plans need to be altered to attend this seminar.').
Coherence and Cohesion
You clearly introduced your request and provided a structured layout, separating your inquiries effectively.
Task Achievement
You have maintained a polite and formal tone throughout the letter, which is suitable for the context.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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