The graphs give data about proportions of the results of a research at a new shopping mall in Auckland, New Zealand
The above-given pie chart mentions the reaction rate of a
research
program conducted at a shopping mall. The chart has been divided in to
four broad categories namely, Satisfied, Very satisfied, Dissatisfied and No comment.
Join the words
into
According to
the data, most of the individuals were satisfied with the research
. About 60 per cent
of people fall under this
category whereas
11 per cent
of audiences were dissatisfied with the content.
10 per cent
of people were with an opinion of no comments on the other hand
17 per cent
of participants were very satisfied with the program.
The chart shows an overall
opinion of opinion-holders as quite positive. For
instance
about 80 per Add a comma
instance,
cent
of the voters rated the research
program as effective by voting for satisfied and very satisfied categories. In contrast
, only few
per Change the article
a few
cent
had a negative impact on it. It is clear that
,
the Remove the comma
apply
overall
reaction of people were
great.
Change the verb form
was
To conclude
, the survey result shows a positive attitude of individuals towards the research
done.
The research
appears to be really useful.Submitted by praneeth2094 on
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