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The line graph gives data on the proportion of children respects to the total young population in the UK between 1990 and 2001. The proportion of children are categories in four age groups.

The line graph gives data on the proportion of children respects to the total young population in the UK between 1990 and 2001. The proportion of children are categories in four age groups.
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The given line graph provides information on
amount
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the amount
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 of children of different
age
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 categories in the total young population in the UK from 1990 to 2001.
Overall
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, two
age
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 groups 15-19
years
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 and 0-4
years
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 all declined throughout the time period,
while
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other
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the other
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 two
age
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 categories 5-9
years
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 and 10-14
years
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 increased.
According to
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 the graph, the percentage of children from 15 to 19
years
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 started at around 26% in 1990,
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this
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, there was a decrease to approximately 23% in 1995.
Then
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 the figures for the same
age
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 group went up consistently until 2001 and reached 25%. The youngest generation from 0-4
years
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 old experienced a rise from 26% to 26,5% during
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the period
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 from 1990 until 1992.
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,
this
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 trend did not
last
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 long and there was a continued drop to 23.5% by the end of
entire
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the entire
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 time period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, years with synonyms.
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