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The line chart shows global population trends as a percentage from 1950 to 2040. To summarize information by selecting key characteristics and compiling a report and, if necessary, make a comparison.

The line chart shows global population trends as a percentage from 1950 to 2040. To summarize information by selecting key characteristics and compiling a report and, if necessary, make a comparison.
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The line graphs
illustrates
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 information on
population
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 trends and
age
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 worldwide in 90 years
period
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, starting from 1950, and include a prediction through 2040.
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, it can be seen that total and urban populations exhibited upward trends, with a prediction extending up,
as well as
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age
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 group 15 to 65 people,
while
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 the rest remained steady and was projected to be relatively constant throughout the entire
period
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. In
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 of
population
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 trends, in 1950, the total and urban populations commenced higher than the rural
population
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, with roughly 10 and 5
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percent
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 respectively.
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, both rose gradually and were predicted to reach their peaks in 2040, with just over 40
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percent
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for
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 the total
population
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 and 35
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percent
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for
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 the urban
population
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.
On the other hand
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, the proportion of the rural
population
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 remained
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unchanged
 over the
period
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. Regarding
age
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 structure,
15
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the 15
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-65
age
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 group
initially
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 showed the highest percentage, at over 5
percent
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. After that, the trend rose sharply
,
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 and was forecasted to touch its zenith point on account of 35
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percent
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. Moving on, The
population
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 under 15 and over 65 started at the same number, at approximately 3
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percent
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.
While
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 the former saw a small increase at the beginning of the
period
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, the latter witnessed a minimal decline,
the
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 dropped and rose to meet at the same level in 1970, with just under 5
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percent
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. Both were expected to increase slowly to surpass 5
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percent
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 in 2040.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, age, period, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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