The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart demonstrates
amount
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the amount
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of each
sectors'
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shares
in the
economy
of Brazil in the decade before and after 2009.
Overall
, it can be seen that all four other industries have been facing a decline
while
the Finance sector has been experiencing a steady rise. First of all, in 2009 the number of Financial
shares
in Brazil's
economy
was about 30% which was the highest amount among the others and
this
section
will experience a 10% rise in the next 20 years when it reaches to peak.
In Contrast
, Manufacturing started with 20%
shares
in the country's
economy
but it has been facing a dramatic constant decrease in 2029 which
it
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will reach one-fourth of its
shares
in comparison to 2009. Second of all,
although
the food
section
and the non-renewable energy
section
saw an increase, 10% and 5% respectively, from 2009 to 2019 both of them will be came back to where they started in 2009.
Also
, the Tourism
section
had a quarter share in the
economy
in 2009 and after a minor drop from 20% to 15% in 2019, it will remain at
this
level in 2029.
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