Writing Task 1 (From Cambridge IELTS Book 4, test 3) You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

Writing Task 1 (From Cambridge IELTS Book 4, test 3)

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the

proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The bar graph illustrates the percentage of
males
and females who achieved various post-school qualifications in Australia in 1999.
overall
, It is evident that Australian men held the higher share in 3 of those degrees, Women, meanwhile, stood first in 2 other qualifications. Looking at the details, with
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oustanding
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outstanding
90% and a mere 10%, Australian men outnumbered their female counterparts in the Skilled vocational Diploma.
Similarly
, 70% of
males
completed
Postgraduate
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a Postgraduate
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Diploma and
this
figure stood at 30% for the other Sex.
Also
, Just above one-third of females and 60% of
males
got their Masters degree.
On the other hand
,
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of women with Undergraduate degrees approximately doubled that
for
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of
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males
, with 70% and about 35%.
in
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terms of Bachelor's
degree
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degrees
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, The figures between genders were quite close to each other, to be specific, half of
men
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the men
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achieved
this
degree and women stood at 45%.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words males with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
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