The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar and line charts below reveal mean monthly
temprature
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temperature
and washing out vesture
sales
in New York for the first half period of
year
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the year
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in 2012.
Overall
, the trend of
tempreture
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temperature
during the period was upward and the highest recorded
tempreture
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temperature
was
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occured
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occurred
in June,
however
,
th
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the
highest number of requests for bathing
suit
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suits
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was recorded in April.
It is clear that
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the temprature
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temprature
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temperature
temperatures
in
first
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half of the year experienced an upward tendency,
overally
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overall
. In
first
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month the
temprature
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temperature
was just over 30
Farenheit
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Fahrenheit
(F) and the experienced a minor reduction and reached exactly
to
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30 F, in February.
Then
,
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tempreture gradiant
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temperature gradient
rose and
finally
, reached
to
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approximately 65 F in June. Revenue from
washing out
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washing-out
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suit
sales
saw an upward tendency from January until April and
then
the recorded amount of
sales
had a downward trend. The
washing out
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suit
sales
touched the highest amount in April just under 300 hundred
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(HTD) and the lowest amount was recorded in June.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly temperatures
  • bathing suit sales
  • correlation
  • monthly breakdown
  • significant changes
  • warmest months
  • speculate
  • trends
  • increase in temperature
  • contrasting
  • predictive speculation
  • general trends
  • specific months
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