The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar and line charts below reveal mean monthly

temprature

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temperature

and washing out vesture

sales

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in New York for the first half period of

year

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the year

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in 2012.

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, the trend of

tempreture

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temperature

during the period was upward and the highest recorded

tempreture

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temperature

was

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occured

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occurred

in June,

however

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the

highest number of requests for bathing

suit

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suits

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was recorded in April.

It is clear that

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the temprature

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temprature

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temperature

temperatures

first

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the first

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half of the year experienced an upward tendency,

overally

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overall

. In

first

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the first

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month the

temprature

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temperature

was just over 30

Farenheit

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Fahrenheit

(F) and the experienced a minor reduction and reached exactly

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apply

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30 F, in February.

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the tempreture

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tempreture gradiant

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temperature gradient

rose and

finally

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, reached

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apply

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approximately 65 F in June. Revenue from

washing out

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washing-out

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suit

sales

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saw an upward tendency from January until April and

then

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the recorded amount of

sales

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had a downward trend. The

washing out

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washing-out

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suit

sales

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touched the highest amount in April just under 300 hundred

thousands dollar

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thousand dollars

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(HTD) and the lowest amount was recorded in June.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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4 paragraphs

164 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

average monthly temperatures
bathing suit sales
correlation
monthly breakdown
significant changes
warmest months
speculate
trends
increase in temperature
contrasting
predictive speculation
general trends
specific months

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