Banking and funding and their role in our life. Methods of paying. Discuss why it is important to open a bank account. Do you think it is safe to keep all your money in a bank? Which payment method do you prefer?

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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

's contemporary era, banking and funding
is
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play a crucial role in our daily life. It is important to open a
bank
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account
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

due to
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safety
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and other numerous reasons that,
this
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essay will discuss
about
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them
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apply

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among my
preferable
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preferred

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payment
method
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methods

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. In
today
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

,
s
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's

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modern world, everything is progressing rapidly methods of paying
has
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have

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changed a lot
than
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in

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past
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the past

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too.
Therefore
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, it is essential to have a
bank
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account
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

because
bank
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accounts have many
benifits
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benefits

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such
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as
,
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apply

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paying
bill
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bills

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and purchasing something online. To exemplify
this
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statement, if you go to the
bank
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for paying
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to pay

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electrisity
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electricity

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bill it will
takes
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take

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even more than
hour
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an hour

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becasue
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because

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of
crowd
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the crowd
a crowd

The noun phrase crowd seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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in
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bank
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the bank

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queue but if have a
bank
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account
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you
could
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can

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pay it from home via some application or website. Nowadays,
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safety
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the safety

The noun phrase safety seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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of keeping money has
became
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become

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a great concern for people. The only ideal suggestion for protecting our money is to put it in a
bank
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. Storing cash at home has several risks like
,
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apply

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stealing and
burn
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burning

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on the other hand
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

,
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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

bank
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banks

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is
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are

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absolutely safe from these kinds of dangers cuz,
today
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every single
bank
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is equipped with security cameras,
fire
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and fire

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alarm
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alarms

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and there are some security guards for enhancing
safety
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.
For instance
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, consider yourself as a
theif
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thief

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would prefer a secure
bank
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for robbing or a house
?
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.

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of
course
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course,

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you will go for a house
due to
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low jeopardize. In conclusion, having a
bank
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account
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is one of our biggest necessities because of
safety
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and
mentioned
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the mentioned

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reasons in
this
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essay.
Today
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, there are
diffirent
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different

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methods for
payments
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payment

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but owing to my perceptions I would choose payment via
mastercard
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Mastercard

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because of
availability
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its availability

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in
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apply

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all over the world.

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Accuracy
Make sure to proofread your work for slight grammar and spelling mistakes, for example, 'banking and funding is play a crucial role' should be 'banking and funding play a crucial role'.
Cohesion
Use a variety of linking words to ensure the smooth flow of ideas. While you have made a commendable attempt, increasing the variety can further improve cohesion.
Complexity
Incorporate a range of sentence structures to demonstrate language flexibility and complexity, which can enhance the overall quality of your essay.
Specific Examples
Offer specific examples to support your points. You've provided general scenarios, but adding more detailed examples could strengthen your arguments.
Task Response
You effectively addressed all parts of the task, providing a clear opinion and reasoning throughout the essay.
Structure
You presented a logical structure, introducing your topic, developing your argument, and concluding your essay, which aids in understanding.
Relevance
You've chosen relevant main points that align well with the topic, showing a good understanding of the subject matter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial institutions
  • Safeguarding
  • Facilitating transactions
  • Online banking
  • Direct deposits
  • Fraud protection
  • Digital payments
  • Economic growth
  • Financial security
  • Intermediaries
  • Credit availability
  • Investment opportunities
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