The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
As you can see the number of
people
who live in
towns
and rural
areas
is
decrasing
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decreasing
for both
People
who
born
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were born
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in Australia and
people
born outside Australia. But the major change is that
people
who
born
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were born
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outside Australia that the percentage of them living in rural
areas
is from 40% to less than 10%. The percentage of
people
who live in
towns
is not changing much for both. Australian
people
like to live in the city more than
towns
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in towns
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or rural
areas
as you can in the growing percentage of
people
who live in
city
Correct article usage
the city
show examples
compare
Wrong verb form
compared
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to
towns
and rural
areas
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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