The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
As you can see the number of
people
who live in towns
and rural areas
is decrasing
for both Correct your spelling
decreasing
People
who born
in Australia and Add a missing verb
were born
people
born outside Australia. But the major change is that people
who born
outside Australia that the percentage of them living in rural Add a missing verb
were born
areas
is from 40% to less than 10%. The percentage of people
who live in towns
is not changing much for both.
Australian people
like to live in the city more than towns
or rural Change preposition
in towns
areas
as you can in the growing percentage of people
who live in city
Correct article usage
the city
compare
to Wrong verb form
compared
towns
and rural areas
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