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The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050.

The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050.
#population #india #china #year #projections #growth
The below figure
demonstrated
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 the trend regarding the
population
 growth of
India
 and
China
 in the first half of the 21st century.
China
 and
India
 both
has
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have
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 been increased in
population
 since 2000.
China
were
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was
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 more populous at the beginning, starting with 1.25
billiomn
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billion
.
Gentle
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A gentle
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 increase
then
 followed, to 1.4
billion
 in the current period. A steep increase
were
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 shown in
India
 compared to
china
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China
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, smaller 1
billion
 to 1.32
billion
at
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in
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 2020.
China
 and
India
 trend follow
a
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different
trajectory
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 s in the future. Projected decrease after reaching the climax of just above 1.4
billion
 in 2025, with a gentle
decerase
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decrease
decreased
 to 1400.
India
however
population
 will follow
with
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a steep curve, will surpass
china
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China
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 in the year
of
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2030,
will
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and will
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held
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hold
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 1.6
billion
at
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by
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 2050.
Conclusion
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,
china
 has a more stable change
of
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in
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population
while
india
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India
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 has a greater change.Part ways after 2020.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, india, china, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "steep" was used 2 times.
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