The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate data about the usage of
water
in 6 regions, which are North
America
, South
America
, Europe, Africa, Central
Asia
, and South East
Asia
, in precise precents.
Overall
,
it is clear that
Central
Asia
, South East
Asia
and Africa are the top 3 areas, in terms of using
water
for agriculture.
In contrast
, industrial and domestic use
are
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popular in
other
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the other
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three regions. As forementioned above Africa, Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
uses 84%, 88% and 81% of their
water
for agricultural purposes.
Whereas
, industrial and domestic use takes up to 5% to 12% in those places.
On the other hand
, the
water
consumption for other areas is different. Just above half and nearly half
water
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is used for industrial
purpose
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in North
America
and Europe, respectively, followed by
one tenth
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by
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South
America
.
In addition
, domestic use for those regions goes between 13% and 18%.
Finally
, it can be seen that among those 3 countries, South
America
has the greatest proportion
on
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using
water
for
agricultural
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agriculture
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, asia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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