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The line graph shows the changes in the number of overseas tourists in three different regions (coast, lakes, and mountains) in each country in Europe. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the changes in the number of overseas tourists in three different regions (coast, lakes, and mountains) in each country in Europe. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates how many
travelers
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travellers
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 visited European
countries'
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countries
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three
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in three
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 particular places from 1987 to 2007.
Overall
, visitors to the
coast
 and lakes had
tendency
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a tendency
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 to grow
whereas
 people who went to the lake fell
dramtically
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dramatically
 in 2002. In detail, two places, the
coast
 and the mountains, were visited by more and more people each year. The figure for the
coast
 never went down for 20 years. It didn't represent huge growth but
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a continous
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continous
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continuous
 increase of approximately 15.
On
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the
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apply
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contrast, the numbers
of
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on
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 the
coast
also
 tended to rise but in 1992
it
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they
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 dipped slightly.
Although
 it had a dip, the figure demonstrated a quite dramatic climb since 1992 of 40.
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, visitors in the lakes indicated
unique
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a unique
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 graph compared to the other places. Between 1987 and 1992, it climbed
non stop
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nonstop
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. The figure started at 10 and went up to 40 within 10 years. From 1997 to 2000, it even soared to about 75. It was the steepest part
in
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of
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 the graph. Afterwards, there was
a
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an
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 enormous difference in 2007. In 2007, the numbers plunged by 25.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coast with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "climb" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dipped" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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