A magazine wants to include contributions from its readers for an article called the book that influenced me most. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine about the book that influenced you most. In your letter Describe what this book was about Explain how this book influenced you Say whether this book would be likely to influence other people Write at least 150 words. You do not need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to the editor of the magazine about the book that influenced you most. I want books about education, music,
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etc. In order that underprivileged children will learn
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books.
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Because I want to include contributions from its readers for
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book would be likely to influence other people. Because underprivileged children will
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adult
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too much. So
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underprivileged children. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Miss Kannika Anawatchayanon
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task achievement
Your letter would benefit from a clearer explanation of the specific book that has influenced you, including its title and author
coherence and cohesion
Organize your thoughts more logically, ensuring each paragraph has a clear focus.
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Specify how the book has influenced you personally, beyond a general wish to help underprivileged children.
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Consider whether the book would influence others by discussing its universal themes or lessons, not just its effect on a specific group.
positive aspect
Your letter demonstrates a noble intention to help underprivileged children through literature.
positive aspect
You used a polite and appropriate tone for addressing the magazine editor.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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