The pie charts below show the proportions of visits to Ireland last year by age group, and by gender, and type of visit.

The pie charts below show the proportions of visits to Ireland last year by age group, and by gender, and type of visit.
The figures illustrate the amount of visitors who travelled to
Ireland
last
year based on three categories, Age, Gender and type of visit.
Overall
, it can be seen that the vast majority of people who spent their time in
Ireland
were between 25 to 34 years old and 45 to 54 years old.
Furthermore
, most of them went there for a holiday. First of all, the young generation, people between 25 to 34, and the old generation, individuals between 45 to 54, had the biggest shares among other age groups with 23% for each.
Also
, the
middle age
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people with about one-fifth per cent had the second largest shares.
However
, the youngsters, children between 0 to 15 with only 6% was the lowest amount in comparison to others. Second of all, spending time in
Ireland
for vacation with about 83% shares between visitors was the most popular activity where visiting
Ireland
for leisure for men was 3% higher than female.
However
, business trips with less than 5% for females were the lowest reason for visiting
Ireland
.
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