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The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first illustration shows total global
energy
 consumption,
while
 the second one depicts the total world
electricity
 generation from the
last
 year. As a whole, the data from both of these pie charts are quite similar,
Also
, it is worth mentioning that only oil and gas are considered as fossil fuels, other sources of
energy
 from the pie charts are not. Total world
energy
 consumption of oil is the largest it made up 34.3% of the chart,
although
 oil generated fairly
small
Correct word choice
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energy
 at 6.7% of all the generated
electricity
. 40% of generated
electricity
 was from coal,
however
, only a quarter of
energy
 consumption was from coal. Combustible renewables and waste didn't generate any
electricity
 at all,
although
 it did consume 10.6% of all
energy
 consumed. The amount of consumed and generated gas was quite similar, both of them were approximately 20%. Hydro and nuclear
energy
 consumed quite little amount of
energy
 2.2% and 6.5%, respectively.
However
, it generated way more
energy
, hydro produced 16.1% of all the generated
energy
,
while
 nuclear produced 15.7% of all the produced
energy
.
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