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The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first illustration shows total global
energy
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 consumption,
while
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 the second one depicts the total world
electricity
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 generation from the
last
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 year. As a whole, the data from both of these pie charts are quite similar,
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, it is worth mentioning that only oil and gas are considered as fossil fuels, other sources of
energy
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 from the pie charts are not. Total world
energy
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 consumption of oil is the largest it made up 34.3% of the chart,
although
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 oil generated fairly
small
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little
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energy
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 at 6.7% of all the generated
electricity
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. 40% of generated
electricity
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 was from coal,
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, only a quarter of
energy
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 consumption was from coal. Combustible renewables and waste didn't generate any
electricity
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 at all,
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 it did consume 10.6% of all
energy
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 consumed. The amount of consumed and generated gas was quite similar, both of them were approximately 20%. Hydro and nuclear
energy
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 consumed quite little amount of
energy
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 2.2% and 6.5%, respectively.
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, it generated way more
energy
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, hydro produced 16.1% of all the generated
energy
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,
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 nuclear produced 15.7% of all the produced
energy
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although, however, while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, electricity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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