The line graph shows the price of banana in Japan, France, Germany, and the USA from 1994 to 2004.

The line graph shows the price of banana in Japan, France, Germany, and the USA from 1994 to 2004.
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the line graph shows the different countries as Japan , France , Germany and
USA
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. It can be seen the difference between 1994 to 2004 , for
Banana
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prices
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of
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kilograms .
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, in Japan,
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prices
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increased sharply from
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prices
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in 1995 .
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, after 6 years the
prices
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of
bananas
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had declined substantially
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per 1.5 kilograms .
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, In France ,
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prices
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had an alternative slowly and
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reached a peak in 2004 .
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, Germany saw a decrease of 1.50 per kilogram .
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, In
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the USA
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the
prices
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of
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had remained stable at the same level of 1.00 .
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line graph
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the
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information
of
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about
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a
difference
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period in the countries
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as
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, the
prices
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of
kilograms's
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kilograms of
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bananas
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were not changed only in Japan has a lot of change
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in
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the level of
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Bananas
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banana
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prices
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words banana, prices, bananas with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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