The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries.

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
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The line graph illustrates the statistics on goods exported from Australia to four different countries in a 22-year period, starting from 1990.
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, it is apparent that Australian
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export
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with Japan and the US experienced a downward trend,
while
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the
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to China and India witnessed
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considerable growth.
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, in 1990,
the
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to Japan and America commenced at higher levels, with well over 10% and 25% respectively.
Japan
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percentage decreased sharply to 20% in 1995. After that, it continued to drop gradually and finished at roughly 18%.
On the other hand
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, the US number fell and rose over a decade,
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dropped to its lowest point
in
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before
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slighly
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slightly
at the end
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of the period.
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, China and India began with lower numbers, just under 5%.
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the
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to India increased slightly, peaking at nearly 8% in 2010, and
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minimally, China's fraction
rocketted
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rocketed
throughout the period, reaching its peak at 30%, surpassing other countries, securing the largest percentage.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words export with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Percentage
  • Exports
  • Trend analysis
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Peak performance
  • Decline
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Inferred
  • Global events
  • Economic context
  • Reflect
  • Influence
  • Patterns
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