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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.
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The pie charts compare
energy
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production
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 in terms of five important categories in 1995 and 2005.
Overall
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, it's clear that the highest proportion of
energy
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 was coal, gas and petrol
production
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.
Whereas
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, the lowest proportions were nuclear and other energies. In 1995 and 2005 the greatest source of
energy
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 was coal at 29,80% and 30,93%, respectively.
Moreover
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, the proportion of gas
energy
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 was 29,63% in 1995,
while
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 in 2005
this
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 was 30,31%. Regarding to
energy
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production
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 of petrol , the figure was 29,21% in 1995.
However
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, it was 19,55% in 2005.
While
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 , the
production
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 of nuclear
energy
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 was 6,40% in 1995, in 2005 it was 10,10%. The lowest proportion of
production
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 was other energies at 4,90% and 9,10% in both years.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nuclear energy
  • Renewable energy
  • Non-renewable energy
  • Technological advancements
  • Government policy
  • Environmental policies
  • Investment in renewable technologies
  • Traditional energy sources
  • Coal usage
  • Natural gas
  • Environmental regulations
  • Energy consumption
  • Energy production levels
  • Proportion
  • Broader trends
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