You are bored in your current job but you enjoy working for your company. You think you would be happier if you moved to a different department in the same company. Write a letter to your employer. In the letter ask to be moved to a position in another department explain how you feel about your current position and your career say why you think changing your job would be good for you and the company You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ………………… You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Dear Mr. Justin, I hope
this
email finds you well. I am writing to share my feelings about my current job arrangement and request a job
position
change. I would like to apply
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place of customer services director, which is the empty place in
marketing
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department now. Since I graduated from a business school, I am always interested in strategies
of
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improving customer
services
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.
Moreover
, I am quite
familar
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familiar
with the goal and the
massion
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mission
passion
of our
company
,
therefore
, I believe that I will make
siganificant
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significant
contributions in
this
position
.
This
is my seventh year working with ABC
company
, I feel really
pround
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proud
to be a member
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the admin team for the past years, helping other employees around , and I have learnt a lot from
this
position
. I would
more
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than happy to continue work in ABC
company
.
However
, I found myself not
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enough
for
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my current
position
from the beginning of
this
year,
sometimes
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even
boring
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as I repetitively did the same work for
such
a long time. I believe that moving to another section
in
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the
company
would be the best
solusion
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solution
. If I could move to
customer
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the customer
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servises
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service
services
department, I would be
energatic
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energetic
and passionate in my team,
thus
being happy and satisfied with my work. I am pretty sure that
this
change would not only benefit my career development but
also
bring positive influence and energy to the market department. Thank you for your time considering my situation, and I am looking forward to your response. Sincerely, Carey
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Grammar
Ensure consistent verb tenses throughout your letter for greater clarity.
Presentation
Consider using paragraph breaks to clearly separate your introduction, the main body, and conclusion for better readability.
Content Depth
Clarify and expand on how your skills and experiences make you a suitable candidate for the new position to strengthen your argument.
Tone
You expressed your request respectfully and provided clear reasons for wanting the change.
Content Relevance
Good use of specific details about your interests and alignment with the company's mission.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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