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The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004.

The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004.
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The graph compares the
amount
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number
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 of foreign
asquisitions
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acquisitions
acquisition
 which came from AUS and Japan to New Zealand
during
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between
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 1994 and 2004.
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, the figures for the two countries showed different trends.
While
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 the number of incoming goods from Australia fluctuated frequently, the figures from Japan remained relatively stable. As the chart reveals, Australia's point started with $4,000
million
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 in early 1994. After one year, it increased gradually to around $6.500
million
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 in 1995.Until 1998,
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the figure
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 fell over $5.5
million
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,
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 plunged significantly to $3
million
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 in 1999, but
then
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 quickly reached a peak with approximately $7.5
million
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 between 2000 and 2001. The digit went down to about $5.5
million
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 in 2009. Afterwards, the figure showed considerable growth to $8.0
million
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 in 2004.Regarding Japan, in 1995, they shipped roughly $3.000
million
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 of overseas procurement to NZL.
This
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 quantity
rised
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raised
risen
rose
 steadily to nearly $6.1
million
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 in 1997.
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this
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, it decreased sharply to below $4,100
million
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 in 1999, but contrast gave considerable growth to $6.1
million
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 in 2001.
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,
subsequently
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 plunged to nearly $2.0
million
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 in 2003 and 2004 respectively.
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