WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The line graphs provided illustrate the number of imports
taken
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place from two
diffrenet
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different
countries (
Australia
and
Japan
) toward New
Zealand
from 1994 to 2004.
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used was NZ$ million.
Overall
, it can be seen that the
import
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imports
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to
Australia
started at 4000
while
,
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japan
's
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imports
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import
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imports
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started at 3000.
Australia
's
import
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imports
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to New
Zealand
was
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higher during 2004 compared to
Japan
's (8000 and 2000 respectively). In terms of New
Zealand
's imports from
Australia
,
it
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they
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stared
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started
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to increase gradually over
ywo
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two
years
then
followed by a downward trend reaching 3000 during 1999.
Furthermore
, it again showed an upward trend
approximately
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of approximately
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7400.
Then
for the
last
2
years
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it fluctuated. With regard to New
Zealand
's imports from
Japan
, during the period from 1994 until
1997
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1997,
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it showed a rise of almost double what it was.
Then
slightly decreaseing in 1999.
Finally
, it
rised
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raised
rose
to exactly 6000 in 2000.
Then
it showed a
steedy
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steady
constant decrease as it reached
to
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2000 in 2004.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, japan, zealand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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