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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The line graphs provided illustrate the number of imports
taken
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 place from two
diffrenet
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different
 countries (
Australia
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 and
Japan
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) toward New
Zealand
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 from 1994 to 2004.
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 used was NZ$ million.
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, it can be seen that the
import
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imports
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 to
Australia
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 started at 4000
while
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,
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japan
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's
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imports
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import
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imports
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 started at 3000.
Australia
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's
import
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imports
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 to New
Zealand
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was
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 higher during 2004 compared to
Japan
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's (8000 and 2000 respectively). In terms of New
Zealand
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's imports from
Australia
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,
it
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stared
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started
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 to increase gradually over
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two
 years
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 followed by a downward trend reaching 3000 during 1999.
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, it again showed an upward trend
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 7400.
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 for the
last
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 2
years
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 it fluctuated. With regard to New
Zealand
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's imports from
Japan
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, during the period from 1994 until
1997
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1997,
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 it showed a rise of almost double what it was.
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 slightly decreaseing in 1999.
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, it
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raised
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 to exactly 6000 in 2000.
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 it showed a
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steady
 constant decrease as it reached
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2000 in 2004.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, japan, zealand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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