You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You need to change your vacation hotel booking. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter, •explain why you need to make the change •what you prefer instead •how this will help you have a better vacation Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
letter in regard to changing the hotel for my vacation. My
husbands
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friend has suggested another hotel which is close to the beach and has a beautiful scenic view of the beach
and
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also
the hotel is running
35
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% offer which comes with a luxurious suite for just 400$ per night. Me and my husband find
this
is more feasible for us, as we can save our money to spend
in
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the vacation and needless to say, enjoy the
breath taking
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breathtaking
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view of the beach every morning from our room. I look forward to your prompt response on
this
matter.
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Task Achievement
Clarify the exact change you want to make. Do you want to cancel your current booking, or are you asking if the current hotel can match the offer?
Coherence and Cohesion
Review your sentences for minor grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. For instance, 'which comes with a luxurious suite for just 400$' should be 'which offers a luxurious suite for just $400.'
Coherence and Cohesion
Provide a clearer structure to your letter by dividing it into more distinct paragraphs addressing separate points clearly.
Greeting and Closing
The greeting and closing are appropriately formal and polite.
Task Achievement
You have addressed the points required in the prompt, including explaining why you need to make the change and how it would benefit your vacation.
Suitable Writing Tone
The tone of your letter is suitable for a formal request to a hotel manager.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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