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The line graph shows the percentage change in taxation and available credit. The bar chart illustrates the development of spending in 3 industries of UK citizens.

The line graph shows the percentage change in taxation and available credit. The bar chart illustrates the development of spending in 3 industries of UK citizens.
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The line graph illustrates how taxation and available credit change over a 20-year period from 1978.
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 the bar chart shows the increase in expenditure in 3 United Kingdom manufactures in 1999
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, both the figures witnessed an upward trend. The line graph showed the
number
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 of taxations much higher than overseas residents. the bar chart
saw
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shows
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 the
number
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 of visitors who came to Turkey was the lowest and France was the highest. The line graph shows an upward trend through 20 years. In 1979, the figure for the UK local
people
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 was at about 12
million
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people
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then
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 gradually went up to 20
million
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people
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 in 1964. Surprisingly, the
number
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 was dramatically soaked up to 55
million
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people
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 to finish the whole period in 1999. And the figure for overseas tourists was the same pattern with 10
million
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people
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 in 1979,
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 continuing at 12
million
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 in 1967 to finish the whole period at 27
million
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 in 1979. The bar chart shows the
UK
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number of UK
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 citizens who used manufacturing was lowest in Turkey at about 2,5
million
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people
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 .
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, in France, we saw the highest
number
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 of
people
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 using households at 12
million
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people
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.The figure for Spain ranked second. The
number
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 of
people
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 travelling to Greece and the USA was approximately 3 and 4
million
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 respectively
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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