The charts show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
The charts show the proportions of British
students
at one university in England who were able to speak other languages
in addition
to English, in 2000 and 2010. In 2000, the allotment demonstrated that a high percentage of
students
did not know any other
language
, and in 2010,
this
figure increased even more. And in both years, the rate who
speaks
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only German remained the same at %10. In
details
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detail
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,
while
students
who can communicate in two other languages was %10, in 2010
this
percentage
rised
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raised
rose
rise
by only %5 in %15. Spanish speakers ranked second in the chart in 2000, at %20 and dropped to %10 in 2010. Those
whose
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speech French were %15 with those who knew another
language
in 2000, in 2010 these consequences changed that French speakers were %10,
while
those who knew another
language
were %20. In conclusion,
students
who do not know a
language
other than English represented a large percentage of
students
in both years,
while
those who know another
language
grew.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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