The charts show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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The charts show the proportions of British
students
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at one university in England who were able to speak other languages
in addition
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to English, in 2000 and 2010. In 2000, the allotment demonstrated that a high percentage of
students
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did not know any other
language
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, and in 2010,
this
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figure increased even more. And in both years, the rate who
speaks
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speak
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only German remained the same at %10. In
details
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detail
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,
while
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students
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who can communicate in two other languages was %10, in 2010
this
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percentage
rised
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raised
rose
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by only %5 in %15. Spanish speakers ranked second in the chart in 2000, at %20 and dropped to %10 in 2010. Those
whose
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who
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speech French were %15 with those who knew another
language
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in 2000, in 2010 these consequences changed that French speakers were %10,
while
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those who knew another
language
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were %20. In conclusion,
students
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who do not know a
language
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other than English represented a large percentage of
students
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in both years,
while
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those who know another
language
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grew.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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