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The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table demonstrates the amount of deviation between different family types who were underprivileged in Australia throughout 1999.
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, the percentage of sole parents was the most dominant number, followed by single with no
children
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 type which was the second highest.
additionally
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, the type of aged couple suffered from the lowest quota. Unit is measured in percentage
According to
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 the table, there was a small gap between the number of sole parents and single with no
children
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 at 21% and 19%, respectively.
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, the chunk of
couples
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 with
children
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 stood at 12% living in poverty.
Moreover
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, the percentage of all households has a similar sum to the
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 of
couples
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 with
children
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 which underwent 11%. Notwithstanding, the lowest number could be seen in aged
couples
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 which was tolerated at 4%. There was 7% of the sum of
couples
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 with no babies. Similar to the single aged person which the quantity was 6% in 1999
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words children, couples with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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