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Band 4.5

“The graph compares the percentage of international students and the percentage of UK learners gaining second class degrees or better at a major UK university.”

“The graph compares the percentage of international students and the percentage of UK learners gaining second class degrees or better at a major UK university.”
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The graph
provieds
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provides
information
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 about the proportion of global
students
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 and the proportion of
the
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apply
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UK
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 education gaining the
second class
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 scores or best at major
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college
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.
Overall
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 , the graph
illustrated
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between
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apply
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UK
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 and international
students
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 gaining
second class
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 degrees or better in the year 2009. As can be
seen
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 there fluctuated of percentages from
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Uk
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UK
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students
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 and international
students
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moreover
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 international
student
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students
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reach
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to
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the highest per cent of
information
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 technology
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in contrast
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 international
students
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 was the lowest
protion
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portion
 of international law . Now turning to details , the figure
of
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for
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 nursing was the same level
of
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 both
student
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students
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while
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 international
students
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 of electric engineering
was
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 higher than
UK
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students
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in addition
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 international
students
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reach
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 to peak of
information
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 technology
it
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 was above 80 %
whereas
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Uk
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UK
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students
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 of
information
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 technology made up under 60 % after that
UK
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students
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 increased moderately untill art history .

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words information, students, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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