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Most people take interviews to select a person for job. What are the other ways? What do you think is the best way to recruit new employees.

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The
candidate
 selection process is based on the performance in the interviews held by employers at a majority of workplaces. There are a plethora of other methods to hire employees. One way is through the reference system and the other way is by testing the
candidate
. I believe examining
candidate's
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 abilities and knowledge is more important.
To begin
 with, some employers hire individuals based on the references they provide. It helps them to verify
background
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 of the
person
through
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 checking with the internal worker who has provided the reference of that
candidate
.
Also
, it is the best method to know the character of the individual. Now, if the whole verification process goes well, it allows the employer to find a trustworthy
person
 for the role. To exemplify, many companies do not want their confidential information to get leaked. They tend to avoid unknown people from getting hired and they follow the leads offered by the present workers who have already established their honesty in the organization. So, if that
person
 brings someone to the workplace
then
 he is absolutely
welcomed
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.
Furthermore
, it is highly crucial to test the ability of a
person
 whom
they
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an employer is considering for the job. Some jobs need specific skills to perform
such
 kinds of roles efficiently.
For example
, In India, the government use competitive examination
technique
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techniques
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 to recruit capable people from millions who are taking
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the test
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test
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tests
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. To pass
such
 kinds of exams is a daunting task for many. It
also
 shows the test-taker's ability to handle the responsibilities and pressures related to the job. In conclusion, if security is more important to an organization
then
 the reference system works appropriately.
However
, to filter a few from millions of people applying for the job
then
 competitive exams are the best method. From my perspective, it is important to check the aptitude of an individual by conducting a test.
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task achievement
Try to focus on a more balanced discussion of alternative methods for recruiting employees. Exploring different methods in more depth can help strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph's main idea is clearly introduced and developed systematically. This will enhance the logical flow.
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You have included relevant and specific examples to support your points, which adds strength to your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an appropriate introduction and conclusion, contributing to a cohesive discussion.
coherence cohesion
The logical progression of ideas is generally well-maintained, making your essay easy to follow.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Assessment Centers
  • Simulate
  • Task-based evaluation
  • Psychometric tests
  • Aptitude
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Reference checks
  • Background checks
  • Artificial intelligence (AI)
  • Machine learning
  • Screening
  • Internships
  • Temporary contracts
  • Trial period
  • Social media screening
  • Professional network
  • Portfolio reviews
  • Peer-group interviews
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Case studies
  • Analytical abilities
  • Decision-making skills
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