The chart and table show working hour and salary for 4 different occupationa. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparison where relevant.
The above chart and table
illustrated
the working Wrong verb form
illustrate
hours
and the annual income for four jobs. The given chart describes the time that they Use synonyms
spends
Change the verb form
spend
Change preposition
on as
as
weekly basis, Correct your spelling
a
While
, the table Linking Words
provide
the amount of Change the verb form
provides
salary
Use synonyms
the
get each year .
Correct your spelling
they
Overall
as it shows Nurses Linking Words
is
the highest working Verb problem
have
hours
they work for more than 50 Use synonyms
hours
per week, Use synonyms
Moreover
Fire service work for less than 40 Linking Words
hours
, Use synonyms
Furthermore
both Linking Words
of
Police service and Teachers Change preposition
apply
worked
for around Wrong verb form
work
of
30 Change preposition
apply
hours
. In Use synonyms
comparation
, they have Correct your spelling
comparison
salary
variety not in the same order as Use synonyms
it's depends
on the time they Change the verb form
it depends
spends
. The average Change the verb form
spend
salary
of police service is 52,050 despite the working Use synonyms
hours
Use synonyms
are
less than 40 weekly. The income of Nurses is around 37,000, Wrong verb form
being
While
they work for more than 50 Linking Words
hour
per week.
In conclusion, There is no correlation between the average Change to a plural noun
hours
salary
and the annual income for each Use synonyms
occupations
.Change to a singular noun
occupation
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, salary with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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