The chart and table show working hour and salary for 4 different occupationa. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart and table show working hour and salary for 4 different occupationa. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparison where relevant.
The above chart and table
illustrated
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illustrate
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the working
hours
and the annual income for four jobs. The given chart describes the time that they
spends
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spend
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on as
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as
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a
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weekly basis,
While
, the table
provide
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the amount of
salary
the
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they
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get each year .
Overall
as it shows Nurses
is
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the highest working
hours
they work for more than 50
hours
per week,
Moreover
Fire service work for less than 40
hours
,
Furthermore
both
of
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Police service and Teachers
worked
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for around
of
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30
hours
. In
comparation
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comparison
, they have
salary
variety not in the same order as
it's depends
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on the time they
spends
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spend
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. The average
salary
of police service is 52,050 despite the working
hours
are
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less than 40 weekly. The income of Nurses is around 37,000,
While
they work for more than 50
hour
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hours
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per week. In conclusion, There is no correlation between the average
salary
and the annual income for each
occupations
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occupation
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, salary with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Occupations
  • Salaries
  • Working hours
  • Average
  • Annual
  • Comparison
  • Discrepancies
  • Professions
  • Doctors
  • Teachers
  • Engineers
  • Retail workers
  • Balanced
  • High-paying
  • Low-paying
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