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The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of cinema visitors in a particular country from 1978 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of cinema visitors in a particular country from 1978 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the percentage of four different
age
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 groups of cinema visitors in a particular country over a 30-year
period
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, which started in 1978.
Overall
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, it is evident that the over-50
age
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group
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 accounted for less interest in watching movies.
In contrast
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, the 14 to 24
age
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group
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 is the most interested in going to the cinema, recording more than 80% over the
period
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 except in 1988.
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 the data, 90% of young residents in
this
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 country went to the cinema, after fluctuating in the range from 90% to 75% over 20 years and ending the
period
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 at around 80%. Similarity can be seen in the two other groups which are the
age
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 25 to 34 and
age
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 35 to 49, which started at 80% and 60% and ended at 70% and 62%, respectively. It is noteworthy that the over-50
age
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group
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 recorded 40
percent
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per cent
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 in 1978 and dramatically decreased by 20% in 1988.
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,
this
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group
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 rose two times to 40% in the next decade before
leveling
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 off during 1998 and 2003 and reaching its peak of 50%
at the end
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 of the
period
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.
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