In today’s job market it is far more important to have practical skills than theoretical knowledge. In the future, job applicants may not need any formal qualifications. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
In today's globalised
world
some consider that work experience is more crucial, Add a comma
world,
others
believe Correct word choice
while others
person
shouldAdd an article
a person
the person
to
know theoretical Change the verb form
apply
knowledge
. In this
essay, I will discuss both sides of this
argument and I will include my point of view.
On the one hand, nowadays, big companies prefer to hire employee
who has more work experience. Because, Add an article
an employee
according to
economical
experts, It will take Replace the word
economic
long
time to teach new staff. TheChange the article
a long
corporatin
do not want to lose time. Correct your spelling
corporation
corporations
Moreover
, people who have practical skills finish work more
earlier rather than new Change the word
apply
one
. Correct pronoun usage
ones
The employers
are not interested in Correct article usage
Employers
to hire
unemployed Change the verb form
hiring
works
Replace the word
workers
,
because they will get the same salary as professionals.
Remove the comma
apply
On the other hand
, some professions demand theoretical knowledge
. Thus
, people should absorb scientific information. For instance
, I think the main responsible job is doctor
. They have to learn at universities, Add an article
a doctor
after
Correct word choice
and after
then
doctors can gain practical skills. Correct your spelling
that
Moreover
, withougt
knowing Correct your spelling
without
human
body they can not cure people. Correct article usage
the human
Additionally
, the
doctors study at universities more than other professions. From Correct article usage
apply
it
we can Add a comma
it,
cansume
that theoretical Correct your spelling
consume
knowledge
is more important.
To sum up
, all mentioned above
practical skills Change preposition
apply
is
important and big companies prefer experienced workers, Change the verb form
are
by
contrast
theoretical Add the comma(s)
contrast,
knowledge
is also
important for some professions as
doctors.Correct quantifier usage
such as
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task achievement
Ensure to elaborate more on your points with specific examples. For instance, discussing other professions that require theoretical knowledge besides doctors could strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving the flow of your sentences. There are some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing which can disrupt the flow. For example, 'others believe person should to know theoretical knowledge' should be 'others believe people should have theoretical knowledge.'
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs discussing both sides, and a conclusion.
task achievement
You provided a balanced view on the topic, discussing both practical skills and theoretical knowledge.
Fully explain your ideas
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
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- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
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