The chart and graph below give the information about three categories of workers in Australia and the unemployment levels within those groups.

The chart and graph below give the information about three categories of workers in Australia and the unemployment levels within those groups.
The pie
chart
and the line graph illustrate the figures
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three
kinds of employees in Australia and the unemployment rate within those brackets.
Overall
, it can be seen that workers born in
English speaking
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countries
(E.S.C) had similar
data
with those non-English speaking
countries
(N.E.S.C). It can
also
be observed that the rate of unemployment in all
three
groups went down over the decade. Beginning with the employees born in
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countries
(ESC), the figures were similar to those
non-English-speaking
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countries
(
NESC
).
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ESC
was
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14 per
cent
and the
NESC
was 10 per
cent
.
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the
data
of workforce born in Australia was over
three
quarter per
cent
and account for a huge place in the pie
chart
.
Besides
, the information of
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other groups was smaller and lower than the group which had the highest
data
and percentage in
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. Turning to the remaining statistics, it is apparent that the
NESC
included the
data
which was always the highest through a decade from 1993 to 2003. At the beginning of the timeframe, the
data
of that
chart
started with approximately seven per
cent
while
the lowest was ESC which started
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three
per
cent
in 1993. There was a drop in the following time
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the statistics of
NESC
and it considerably declined until
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half in 1997. After that time, it fluctuated to the end of
timeframe
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and ended with nearly
three
per
cent
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, three, countries, data, nesc, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 5 times.
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