some people get into debt by buying things they dont need and cant afford . what are the reasons for this behaviour? what action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

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In many nations

people

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are getting into

debt

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by borrowing more money from

bank

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banks

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, financial houses and

from

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other investment firms

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problem

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is getting bigger

everyday

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. Several

people

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are buying unwanted

things

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which

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are

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not needed for their

life

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and they are paying too much for those products and

service

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services

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essay gives the major causes for

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unwanted buying

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things

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of things

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and solutions to prevent

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problem

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. In

modern

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the modern

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world

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world,

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people

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are getting into

debt

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trap

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so easily all financial firms are planning to pull working professionals into

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debt

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trap

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cycle. The main

problem

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is with

people

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and they want to explore

lot

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a lot

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things

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it can be a new product or service in the market, They like to travel a lot and they

spent

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so much on these

things

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, so they don't have any money in their savings so they borrow. Another major

problem

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people

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are having

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many desires these days,

people

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want to live a fake

life

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by looking into others

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life

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styles

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lifestyles

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and to achieve these

things

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people

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spent

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more money so

as a result

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they borrow and buy

things

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which is unnecessary for their

life

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, my friend bought a brand new phone for Rs 1,00,000 by EMI option from

local

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fund house and now he paying 18% interest, now he is in financial trouble. To prevent

people

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from getting into

debt

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we need to educate them more on financial

informations

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information

pieces of information

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like loan drawbacks, loan

schems

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schemes

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law

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laws

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and regulations from the government. The best way to

avoiding

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avoid

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this

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debt

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problem

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is by giving more awareness towards public governments

are doing

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apply

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this

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they are giving

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

349 words

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some people get into debt by buying things they dont need and cant afford . what are the reasons for this behaviour? what action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

Your opinion

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