Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employee. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university?

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that
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educational
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can
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knowledge
and
skills
to their graduates and
others
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community
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that the course is useful if the students
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the ability to
knowledge
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. In my
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the
universities
should provide them
enough
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knowledge
to know about their
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properly. First of all,
Universities
educations
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can
helps
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us that who we are. Without proper
education
, we
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prosper in our
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, that's the reason we need a proper
education
. In
universities
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they give us that proper
education
. In our workplace, we need
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enough
skills
and
knowledge
. If we don't have that
knowledge
and
skills
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then
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it will be difficult for us to get a job. So,
universities
should
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this
responsibilites
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responsibility
responsibilities
.
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the others opinion
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,
Universities
should teach
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our
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the
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ethical
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moral
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morals
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and better know the courses which may be
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benefits
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in our workplace. In
Univeristy
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university
, we learn many things,
such
as
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is good and
which
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is bad in our
life
.
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,
universities
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grauates
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graduates
should
be learn
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basic ethics, which is very important
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their regular
life
and course might
be help
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them to know about these issues. In
universities
knowledge
and
skilles
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skills
make the
graduates
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graduate's
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life
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lives
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better and secure. In Conclusion, I will promote the first opinion. In the
education
institution
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institutions
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, they should
be
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teach the
gradutes
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graduates
the basic
knowledge
and
skills
in their job places. Graduates can
be learn
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their
moral
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morals
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and ethics in their
home
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and their parents
has
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the responsibility to take
this
but in university, they should give outside
knowledge
and give them enough
skills
.
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