Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employee. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university?

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knowledge
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us that who we are. Without proper
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it will be difficult for us to get a job. So,
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ethical
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and better know the courses which may be
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in our workplace. In
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grauates
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basic ethics, which is very important
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their regular
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them to know about these issues. In
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knowledge
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better and secure. In Conclusion, I will promote the first opinion. In the
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teach the
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in their job places. Graduates can
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but in university, they should give outside
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