One of your friends wants to apply for a job at a summer school camp as a sports trainer. Write a letter to the camp manager to recommend your friend. In your letter: osay how well you know your friend odescribe the qualifications and experience that your friend has oexplain why your friend would be suitable for this job.

Dear Sir/Madam I am writing
this
letter to recommend my friend about the job application
of
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sports
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a sports
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coach
during
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the summer school camp. My
friend
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name is Chris, we have
been knowing
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each other since junior high school. I know him very well because we often exercise together, discuss a lot of things about sports, exercises, and training and
also
he is one of the most motivated and curious
person
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I know. Chris has studied in physique major for 3 years in university,
have
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many certifications,
such
as first aid for injury
while
training, muscle training and many more and
his
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is
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interest
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in physical training. He
also
can teach patiently step by step and explain the theory from basic knowledge to
advance
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knowledge. I will be very grateful if you would take him into
your
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consideration, because he is very suitable for the application, since he
is
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not only
know
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the theory about physical training but
also
know
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the
practical
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practicals
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. I look forward to hearing from you Sumitro
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task achievement
The letter covers all the bullet points, but it could be improved by providing more specific examples of Chris’s qualifications and experiences, such as specific certifications or achievements.
task achievement
Consider revising some awkward phrases and grammatical mistakes to make your letter clearer and more concise. For example, 'My friend name is Chris' should be 'My friend's name is Chris'.
coherence
Try to organize your paragraphs better by clearly distinguishing between different points. One paragraph can discuss your relationship with Chris, another his qualifications, and another his suitability for the job.
coherence
Pay attention to some minor grammar errors such as 'have been knowing' which should be 'have known', and 'physique major' which should be 'physical education major'.
greeting closing
You provided a closing sentence that expresses gratitude and a hope for a positive response, which adds a polite touch to the letter.
writing tone
Your tone is suitably formal and matches the purpose of the letter.
logical structure
You made an effort to clearly list Chris’s qualifications and experiences, which is essential for a recommendation letter.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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