One of your friends wants to apply for a job at a summer school camp as a sports trainer. Write a letter to the camp manager to recommend your friend. In your letter: osay how well you know your friend odescribe the qualifications and experience that your friend has oexplain why your friend would be suitable for this job.

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Dear Sir/Madam I am writing

this

letter to recommend my friend about the job application

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sports

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a sports

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coach

during

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the summer school camp. My

friend

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name is Chris, we have

been knowing

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each other since junior high school. I know him very well because we often exercise together, discuss a lot of things about sports, exercises, and training and

also

he is one of the most motivated and curious

person

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I know. Chris has studied in physique major for 3 years in university,

have

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many certifications,

such

as first aid for injury

while

training, muscle training and many more and

his

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interest

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in physical training. He

also

can teach patiently step by step and explain the theory from basic knowledge to

advance

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knowledge. I will be very grateful if you would take him into

your

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consideration, because he is very suitable for the application, since he

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not only

know

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the theory about physical training but

also

know

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the

practical

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. I look forward to hearing from you Sumitro

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task achievement

The letter covers all the bullet points, but it could be improved by providing more specific examples of Chris’s qualifications and experiences, such as specific certifications or achievements.

task achievement

Consider revising some awkward phrases and grammatical mistakes to make your letter clearer and more concise. For example, 'My friend name is Chris' should be 'My friend's name is Chris'.

coherence

Try to organize your paragraphs better by clearly distinguishing between different points. One paragraph can discuss your relationship with Chris, another his qualifications, and another his suitability for the job.

coherence

Pay attention to some minor grammar errors such as 'have been knowing' which should be 'have known', and 'physique major' which should be 'physical education major'.

greeting closing

You provided a closing sentence that expresses gratitude and a hope for a positive response, which adds a polite touch to the letter.

writing tone

Your tone is suitably formal and matches the purpose of the letter.

logical structure

You made an effort to clearly list Chris’s qualifications and experiences, which is essential for a recommendation letter.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

168 words

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