The line chart shows global population trends as a percentage from 1950 to 2040. To summarize information by selecting key characteristics and compiling a report and, if necessary, make a comparison.

The line chart shows global population trends as a percentage from 1950 to 2040. To summarize information by selecting key characteristics and compiling a report and, if necessary, make a comparison.
The given line graph illustrates the percentage of the
population
in urban and rural areas in the world within a
period
of 90
years-commencing
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years commencing
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from 1950
while
the other line graph shows the percentage of the
population
based on age within a
period
of 90 years since 1950.
overall
,the highest rate of the
population
can be observed in urban areas in 2040
whereas
the highest number of
population
based on age can be seen in 15-65 years in 2040 and
this
group have a move upward trend during the
period
. At the beginning of the
period
, the rate of rural and urban was the same amount at just nearly 5
while
this
number was just over 10
for
Change preposition
in
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total. urban and total increased moderately to get to 38 and 40 respectively
at the end
of
period
Correct article usage
the period
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while
rural keeps the same trend to
finished
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finish
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well under 10.
according to
the age diagram,at the beginning of the
period
, all categories have the same amount around 5%
then
this
number keeps fluctuating to get 35
at the end
of the
period
for 15-65 years
whereas
the other two categories keep the same trend to finish at 5.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.

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