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The graphs below show the percentage of math graduates and all graduates who got full time jobs after graduating from a university in Australia and also show the average salary of both these types of grads, from 2004 to 2012.

The graphs below show the percentage of math graduates and all graduates who got full time jobs after graduating from a university in Australia and also show the average salary of both these types of grads, from 2004 to 2012.
The graph below illustrates the
percentage
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 of
math
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 and all
graduates
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 who achieved full-time positions and their remuneration after completing their studies at a university in Australia from 2004 to 2012.
Overall
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, the
percentage
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 of
math
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 and all
graduates
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 who secured full-time jobs experienced an upward trend in the first 2
years
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,
then
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 it witnessed a contrasting movement in the following
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. A closer look at the graph showing the
percentage
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 of
math
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graduates
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 who got full-time jobs hit off with approximately 80% in 2004, reached its peak in 2006 at 90%,
then
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 gradually fell back to around the same number (80%) after 6
years
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.
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, the proportion of all
graduates
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 started at approximately 65%, rose around 20% in the first 4
years
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,
then
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 hit rock bottom to the same figure in 2012.
While
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 the
percentage
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 fluctuates, the average salary of both grads rose over the given period. The average remuneration of
math
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 and all
graduates
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 with full-time jobs was $41,000 in 2004,
subsequently
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 rising to $56,000 and $51,000 in 2012 respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, math, graduates, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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