Task 1: The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.

Task 1: The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
The chart below illustrates the
proportion
of individuals who ate five sections of fruits and vegetables
for
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each day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
Overall
, it can be seen that the majority of people who
eating
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fruits and
vegetable
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women,
while
, the opposite
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true for children.
Additionally
, the
percentage
of eating them increased
in
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each year. Examining for
further
detail, the
proportion
of women who
eating
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ate
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fruit and
vegetable
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each day in 2006 was the highest, by over 30%. In 2001, it was 20%, which is lower than the
percentage
in 2002, by 5%. From 2002 to 2005, the
percentage
went up gradually by 5% for each year and reached
to
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30% in 2005. In 2007, it
has
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decreased to 30%, which was similar to the
percentage
in 2005
as well as
higher than the
proportion
in 2008, by 3%. Turning back to the remaining statistic,
regard to
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the
proportion
of men who ate fruit and vegetables
for
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each day, from 2001 to 2003, it remained at the same
percentage
, by 17%,
then
continued to
rose
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slightly
2
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%
for
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each year and
reach
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reached
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to
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over 20% in 2006. From 2006 to 2008, the
proportion
stayed at the same
percentage
. Moving on to the
percentage
of children, the trend was similar to men as the
proportion
of children
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fruit and vegetables remained at 10% from 2001 to 2003,
then
had
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went up to over 20% for 3 years. Since 2006, the
percentage
had increased slightly about 3%,
then
continued to
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down
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which
was
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resembled
to
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the
proportion
in 2006.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 8 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • portion
  • consumption
  • trend
  • significant increase/decrease
  • stability
  • public health campaign
  • awareness
  • socio-economic factors
  • health implications
  • daily intake
  • nutritional habits
  • dietary guidelines
  • public policy
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