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Writing Task 1 you have bought some clothing onllne and are not s atisfied with your purchase. Write a letter to the company that you bought the clothing from. In your email -> give details of the purchase -> describe the problem -> explain why you need a replacement urgently Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

#onllne #purchase #company #email #replacement #addresses #sir #madam
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I am writing
this
 letter to bring your attention to a recent purchase of
a
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some clothing online that has unfortunately proven to be defective. I made
a
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 online purchase two weeks ago
online
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apply
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from your official website
from
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Caanada
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Canada
.The reference number was SOP002. It was two
lenghas
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lengths
, one
in
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brown
color
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 and the other one
is
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Sky blue. I selected
Small
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 size which fits me well. The total amount for these
both
 was 450$ which includes free shipping at my location.
Moreover
, to let you know
I
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 package was delivered yesterday and when I opened
i
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 got so disappointed to see that my
cloths
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 sent to me by your company
was
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 incorrect. The sizes of
both
 items were Large
instead
 of small and the colours of
both
 dresses were not the actual ones which
i
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 ordered.
Addition
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 to
this
,
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the duppata
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duppata
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dupatta
 of
both
 items were torn and they
was
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 not even packed properly.
Furthermore
, I want the replacement of these clothes as soon as possible. I am living overseas and I am going to return to my country next week to attend my
cousins
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cousin's
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 wedding. I placed
this
 order for a special occasion. I respectfully urge
to
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 replace my order with the correct shipment so that I can wear those items
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wedding
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the wedding
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. Thank you for your prompt attention to
this
 order. Yours faithfully, John
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task achievement
Make sure to double-check for spelling mistakes and typos, such as 'i got' which should be 'I got', and 'duppata' should be 'dupatta'. This will help improve your task response score.
task achievement
Try to provide a bit more detail about the problem to fully achieve a complete response. For example, describe exactly how the size and color differences affected your expectations, and include more specific details about the damage to the dupatta.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the logical structure by separating the description of the problem and the explanation of why a replacement is needed more clearly into distinct paragraphs. This will improve coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
You have provided a clear reason why you need an urgent replacement, which is well addressed under time constraints for the wedding.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are appropriate and formal, which is suitable for this type of letter.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph addresses a specific aspect of the task, which helps to maintain clarity and focus.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • purchase details
  • order number
  • type of clothing
  • amount paid
  • specific issues
  • wrong size
  • poor quality
  • damage
  • urgency
  • replacement
  • upcoming event
  • personal necessity
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