Writing Task 1 you have bought some clothing onllne and are not s atisfied with your purchase. Write a letter to the company that you bought the clothing from. In your email -> give details of the purchase -> describe the problem -> explain why you need a replacement urgently Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing
this
letter to bring your attention to a recent purchase of a
some clothing online that has unfortunately proven to be defective.
I made Remove the article
apply
a
online purchase two weeks ago Change the article
an
online
from your official website Rephrase
apply
from
Change preposition
in
Caanada
.The reference number was SOP002. It was two Correct your spelling
Canada
lenghas
, one Correct your spelling
lengths
in
brown Change preposition
apply
color
and the other one Change the spelling
colour
is
Sky blue. I selected Unnecessary verb
apply
Small
size which fits me well. The total amount for these Correct article usage
the Small
both
was 450$ which includes free shipping at my location.
Moreover
, to let you know I
package was delivered yesterday and when I opened Correct pronoun usage
my
i
got so disappointed to see that my Change the capitalization
I
cloths
sent to me by your company Correct your spelling
clothes
was
incorrect. The sizes of Correct subject-verb agreement
were
both
items were Large instead
of small and the colours of both
dresses were not the actual ones which i
ordered. Change the capitalization
I
Addition
to Change preposition
In addition
this
, Correct article usage
the duppata
duppata
of Correct your spelling
dupatta
both
items were torn and they was
not even packed properly.
Change the verb form
were
Furthermore
, I want the replacement of these clothes as soon as possible. I am living overseas and I am going to return to my country next week to attend my cousins
wedding. I placed Change to a genitive case
cousin's
cousins'
this
order for a special occasion. I respectfully urge to
replace my order with the correct shipment so that I can wear those items Correct pronoun usage
you to
on
Change preposition
to
wedding
.
Thank you for your prompt attention to Add an article
the wedding
a wedding
this
order.
Yours faithfully,
JohnSubmitted by baljeetkhehra11318 on
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task achievement
Make sure to double-check for spelling mistakes and typos, such as 'i got' which should be 'I got', and 'duppata' should be 'dupatta'. This will help improve your task response score.
task achievement
Try to provide a bit more detail about the problem to fully achieve a complete response. For example, describe exactly how the size and color differences affected your expectations, and include more specific details about the damage to the dupatta.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the logical structure by separating the description of the problem and the explanation of why a replacement is needed more clearly into distinct paragraphs. This will improve coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
You have provided a clear reason why you need an urgent replacement, which is well addressed under time constraints for the wedding.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are appropriate and formal, which is suitable for this type of letter.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph addresses a specific aspect of the task, which helps to maintain clarity and focus.
The Greeting
Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.
Always start an informal letter in the ways:
- Dear + name
- Hi / Hello + name
‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.
For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:
- Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
- Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.